As I lie on the grass I eat my sweet corn chips with my cat Row and my dog Sweet. The blue birds fly across the sky over my house. ‘ Come on Amiria let’s go to the beach’ Yelled mum. ‘Okay Mum’ Replied Amiria. They walked down to the beach side by side with Sweet the dog. ‘ ‘Look mum there is the beach and there is the Kai iwi Beach Park. Said Amiria. ‘ Sweet do you want to play fetch? Asked Mum ‘ Ruff ‘ Sweet replied ‘ FETCH ‘ Yelled Amiria. So they went to go and play in the water and play at the beach park. They lived happily ever after.
By Amiria
This is such a lovely story, and you can clearly see you have included all the words you needed. I'm impressed you used one word as a name of the dog- that's very imaginative. Keep up the good work
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ReplyDeleteThis is a really good story.
I like the way you used punctuation in your story.
awesome 100 word challenge amiria, alot of awesome words for it done
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ReplyDeleteHi this is Dhannis from Broadlands school you really hooked me in your writing Amiria.
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